We talked about this in class. Do
you remember? In order to
connect sentences inside a paragraph, you can change the order of the
clauses within the sentences.
For example:
Our school is in a very old building.
There is a new media center in front of the old building.
({?
+ N}, {N + G})
is not as good as:
Our school is in a very old building. In front of the old building, there is a new media center.
({?
+ N}, {G + N})
The second set of sentences link well. First, school to old building (N),
and then it continues, old building (G), to media
center ( N). The new information is added to
the information we
already know from the last sentence. However, in the first set of
sentences it goes from school to old building(N),,
then to media
center(N), and then back
to
old building(G).
This is strange.
Here's another example:
Some students never clean the
classroom. The whole school
seems dirty if we don't clean the classrooms.
({?
+ N}, {N + G})
is not as good as:
Some students never clean the
classroom. If we don't
clean the classrooms, the whole school seems dirty.
({? + N}, {G + N})
The ideal text flows: {G +
N}, {G + N}, {G + N}, {G + N}
as much as possible.
*Note:
Some sentences can not be connected like this. Like, if you're starting
out with something new (N).
Now go to 'Quizlab'
and do the quiz called 'Given to New'.
After you are finished with the quiz, read the explanation of
the answers.
The 'classwords' are:
class1writing,
class2writing.....
The passwords
are:
101,102,103....
201,202,203....
Enter 'Quizlab' >>>>
"Zero One Zero" Is a
short movie made by film students. What does it mean? You will
have to use your imagination
because there are many things left unexplained. Here are some
things for you to think about:
Where was he when he woke up?
Where did the book come from?
Who was in the pictures?
Where did the plane come from?
Why was it chasing him?
What was the machine?
Where did he go?
As you are writing, try to make a
{G +
N}, {G + N), {G + N} flow.
You can download the movie at home if you want to: >>
download "Zero One Zero"
Go to Criterion and write your version of the story
Zero One Zero.
Enter 'Criterion'
>>>> 
